Drabbles: Anya, Clem and Harmony

[aurey09]

These are my first three drabbles, so I'd really love to hear what anyone thinks.

Title: Introduction
Author: Aurey09
Rating: PG13
Character: Clem
Word count: 100 
Number: 1/100

“I’m not evil!” Clem held his arms up as Spike moved towards him. He’d heard things. He wanted to stay alive.

“I am.”

“Hey, I know where there’s this really cool poker game being held. I could get you in.”

Spike studied him.

“You’re Spike, right? I heard you were all about the fighting. Truth is, I’m not. Where’s the challenge in that?”

“Right? So what‘s the stakes.”

“Kittens.”

“What? You play for kittens?”

“They taste great… oh, living creatures. But you can always exchange them for money, if that’s your deal.” He held out his hand. “Name’s Clem.”

Title: Unappreciated
Author: Aurey09
Rating: PG13
Character: Anya
Word count: 100 
Number: 2/100

Ungrateful Bastards, it’s ‘Oh, Anya is human again, she’ll drop everything to help us.” - I don’t own them. Maybe Buffy - she’s saved my life a bunch of times but I helped to resurrect her, I don’t often mention that  because she get pissy about it.

I went home to change and here I am dutifully back. I took a key so I wouldn't have to break in - I’m considerate, if I broke a window Xander would only have to fix it, with his sexy tool belt, which would only lead to sexual frustration.

Why do I bother?

Title: Political Correctness
Author: Aurey09
Rating: PG13
Character: Harmony
Word count: 100 
Number: 3/100

Harmony marched into Angel’s office brandishing a booklet in her hand.

“I think we should start filling the water coolers with pigs’ blood.”

“What?”

“There’s not enough equal rights for vampires round here.” She couldn’t believe Angel’s lack of awareness. “They made me read a pamphlet, but there’s nothing about vampires - it needs updating.”

“We have Necro-tempered windows.” Angel tapped the glass.

“It’s a start.”

“Change is a slow, painstaking process.”

“Pain-staking! That’s like negative word for us.” She waited for Angel’s outrage to surface. He would normally have snapped at her by now. “Doesn’t it bother you?”

“No.”

Comments

[sl-podcast.livejournal.com]

ROTFL... I love the painstaking... awesome. Great job... all of them seem to capture the characters... I love Clem.

[ezagaaikwe.livejournal.com]

Drabbles are hard--to capture a "moment" in an economical 100 words. (I tend to go on and on--I should write more, & hone the skill of brevity, which I sorely lack.)

These are very good drabbles. These are also my three favorite minor characters, and ones I've never written (except for an evil Angelus once, a couple years ago.) You did a fine job nailing each one's voice.

[lorelei-frolick.livejournal.com]

These are great. I like how you have Spike and Clem meet, and that Clem was the one who brought him in to the poker game. :)

The equal rights for vampires is hilarious.

My only suggestions are that I think Anya's would be stronger if it was entirely told from the first-person - you'd be able to make the most of her unique and amusing voice that way.

Also, the dialogue for Clem's drabble could use a bit more punctuation.

[blueanddollsome.livejournal.com]

These are good. I think the Harmony one's my favourite. I think of all of them it's the most tightly focused on the one idea (vampire rights) which makes it good. And, of course, big with the funny.

You've really got all of the characters down pat, which is what makes reading these so enjoyable.

Drabbles are hard. I always go over 100 words.

[shinodabear.livejournal.com]

*applause for your first three drabbles*
They were very nice. LOVED the blood in the water coolers. . . or would they have to be water warmers? :)

[spuffyduds.livejournal.com]

Yay for you taking the drabble plunge--and with good stuff too! Painstaking was a hoot.

[myfeetshowit.livejournal.com]

Drabbles are addicting. Both when it comes to writing them, and when it comes to reading ones that are as good as yours.

[boy-named-susie.livejournal.com]

Love the Harmony drabble. Equal rights for vampires - great stuff!

[goodbyebird]

Yay, first take on Clem and Spike meeting/poker stuff. Really fits Spike.

The Anya one had me grinning though. You have her completely down.