ext_15200 ([identity profile] myfeetshowit.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] aurey09 2007-02-02 05:12 am (UTC)

These are both very nice. I particularly like this line:
She tilted her head upwards letting the rain slice along her face.

The use of the word 'slice' is an excellent choice, and in that one moment Illyria leapt off the page.

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