These are great. I like how you have Spike and Clem meet, and that Clem was the one who brought him in to the poker game. :)
The equal rights for vampires is hilarious.
My only suggestions are that I think Anya's would be stronger if it was entirely told from the first-person - you'd be able to make the most of her unique and amusing voice that way.
Also, the dialogue for Clem's drabble could use a bit more punctuation.
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Date: 2007-01-27 06:33 am (UTC)The equal rights for vampires is hilarious.
My only suggestions are that I think Anya's would be stronger if it was entirely told from the first-person - you'd be able to make the most of her unique and amusing voice that way.
Also, the dialogue for Clem's drabble could use a bit more punctuation.